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道尔顿新华公学:初中作文怎么写? 特级教师来支招!

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道尔顿新华公学:初中作文怎么写? 特级教师来支招!

文字是有温度的。这温度通过笔尖流淌下来具化为一个个鲜活的人物,一道道亮丽的风景。这温度能治愈心灵,能陪伴成长。用心品读,去感知文字背后的冷峻或炽热,我们也就多收获了一份睿智或美好。——初中语文教研组组长 廖虹

在2020“湾区杯”南山区初中语文第24届学生现场作文比赛中,我校张芝慧、倪梓茜、 黄佳玉、邱茗乐、司馨妍荣获二等奖。

道尔顿学子爱阅读,也爱写作,道尔顿的语文老师们希望孩子们的作文能写出深度、写出高度、写出温度,正如她们做有温度的教育一样。

什么样的文章是好文章?好文章该怎么写?我们一起来看老师怎么说!

作文小妙招 

道尔顿新华公学

 

张丽萍 特级教师

如何围绕主题选择典型、真实、准确、新颖、富有表现力的材料,今天从选材步骤和方法上给大家支个招。

一、选材的步骤

选:在草稿纸上简略地列出相关的材料,认真分析鉴别,选择最恰当的材料。

比:比较选择的材料,合理地安排材料的详略。

定:定格突出中心的材料进行细节描写。

二、选材的方法

(一)以小见大法

“小”指细小的事物,即平凡的小事、普通的小事。

“见大”是指从一件或几件平凡、普通的小事中挖掘重大的意义。或者从小情节、小感动中传递一种情感,表现人的精神、品质、性格。要选小的材料,不选大而空的材料。

(二)避浅就深法

“深”是指要选择能够写出人的精神层面和思想情感的材料,如习惯形成、兴趣培养,精神引领等。要在选择点上有所取舍,尽量不选浅薄无思想的,而是选择那些立意深,与主旨紧密勾连的材料。

(三)推陈出新法

“新”指选取新鲜、新颖、视角独特的材料或者选择通过普通的物品、普通的事件去社会大背景,折射道理、反映主题、赋予作品新意的材料。

(四)去伪存真法

“伪”即指那些大而空、虚而假的材料。“真”指符合客观事实的、现在发生的、未来有可能发生的“接地气”的材料。多以人称,立足于自己所见所闻的经历,着眼于真情实感的熟悉的材料。记真事、写真人、抒真情,才能更好地表现主题。

(五)多角度法

用片段式构思或者提纲式构思时,需要多个材料。这时要从不同角度在多个材料中选取典型的、有代表性的材料,使所选材料涵盖生活的面广一些,更好地表现主题。

如写妈妈的关怀,可以从思想上、生活上、学习上等不同的角度选取材料。帮助有困难的人可以从心理上、经济上、身体上的帮助来写。

总之,素材主要来源于学校、家庭、社会、自然、阅读,我们在学习中要善于总结归类,就能在茫茫素材中慧眼找到所需材料,为我所用。

张丽萍,中学语文特级教师、省骨干教师、省模范教师、市二级功勋教师,教龄三十三年,哈尔滨市未来教育家培养对象。

曾被聘为黑龙江省“讲学团”成员,到十二个地市送教下乡,上课改观摩课,讲成长故事,与当地教师进行探讨交流。

所做的课改课被收录在国家级《新课例选》,光碟在全国发行。

曾两次接受省广播电视报的采访,分享学科教学感悟、德育管理智慧。

三十年的工作经历中,参与过两所学校创业、起步、发展的历程,在品味着学校发展及个人成长的酸甜苦辣的过程中,不断思考着、实践着。

用“心中有爱,生活有情,教学有法,思想有德”自勉。以“内心有阳光,事业有追求,做事有品位,工作有业绩”勉人。

先后撰写了二十余篇文章在报刊发表或在教育教学研讨会上获奖。

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